Taking pictures is one thing that I always consider as a most wonderful part in one's life. I also consider that it is a good thing to have photos because it is a kind of memory which can remind me a lot of beautiful things when I am getting old.
However, I rarely take pictures since I was in junior high school because I didn't have much time to take pictures. I think it was a kind of pity!
So, I've decided that, from now on, if I could have extra time, I will take more photographs as possible as I can in order to keep every wonderful memory that I will have experienced so that I could prove and share my life experience with my sons and children when I'm old.
However, I rarely take pictures since I was in junior high school because I didn't have much time to take pictures. I think it was a kind of pity!
So, I've decided that, from now on, if I could have extra time, I will take more photographs as possible as I can in order to keep every wonderful memory that I will have experienced so that I could prove and share my life experience with my sons and children when I'm old.
1 意見:
Chinese speakers, it seems, love the word "consider" and don't like the word "think". Native speakers of English much prefer the word "think" and use "consider" to mean "think about", as in "I will consider your offer and let you know my answer next Monday".
Your first sentence would be better if it were shorter: "Taking pictures is wonderful" or "I love to take pictures". You can add "because the photos I take when I'm young will bring back memories when I become old". In other words, your first paragraph is verbose: too many words.
You might change your second paragraph to say something like this: "Unfortunately, however, I haven't taken many pictures since junior high school. I just haven't had time. What a pity!"
Your final paragraph is also verbose. "Therefore, I've decided that whenever I have spare time, I will take as many photographs as I can to save my wonderful memories, to prove that I did some things, and to share my life experience with my children." One doesn't have "sons and children" but "sons and daughters" -- which, I suppose you might want to say to tell your reader/listener that you have no particular preference for children of one sex -- or, simply, "children".
Your ideas are clear, so there's no problem with that, but you ramble on and on. It's as if you wanted to add unnecessary words to make your post longer.
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